English 2041- Writing Assignment #2: Critiquing a Travel Narrative

Editing Sheet

Editor:________________________________ Writer:____________________________

Writer: Please turn in this editing sheet along with the draft the editor responded to when you submit your final copy.
Editor: If you didn't finish editing in class, this sheet should be completed at home and returned to the writer in the following class.

This paper is to be written in traditional expository format (introduction, body, conclusion).

Read Only the first two paragraphs:

1. Check 1st Paragraph
Yes____ No___ Paper has a title
Yes____ No___ Interesting lead-e.g., question, quotation, provocative statement 
Yes____ No___ Introductory Device -Which One? (
Check introduction/conclusion link ) _______________________
Yes____ No___ Brief mention of article and author critiqued
Yes____ No___ Titles of articles are correctly punctuated
Yes____ No___ Thesis statement which hints at main argument of paper.  Can indicate an organizational scheme.
Yes____ No___ Paper is 750 - 1,000 words (3-4 pages)

 

Interesting lead -- Yes___ No___

2. Thesis – Is the thesis set up in the beginning paragraph? Yes___No___

What is the thesis/purpose of the paper? What will the writer prove or illustrate?

 

 

Read the rest of the essay now.

3. Does the thesis predict what comes in the body of essay? Yes___No___

Comments:

 

4. Organization

(A). Number the paragraphs in the paper and give each a two-word label (label content, not purpose). What organization scheme seems to be present? Should it be changed?

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(B). Does each paragraph contain only one main idea? Yes____ No____

Indicate Number of Problem Paragraphs:

5.  Concluding device— Yes___ No___ Which One? (Check Class homepage) and (No summaries please)

6.  Paragraphs--

    Are transition devices present in the first sentence of every paragraph? Yes___ No___

    If not, which paragraphs need them? _______________

    Do the topic sentences contain words that announce the section of the paper under consideration? Yes____No____

    Indicate any problem paragraphs:

    Does each paragraph contain only one main idea? Yes____ No____

    Indicate any problem paragraphs

7.  Development

                    What six assertions being discussed  in the paper?

 

 

Are these six items discussed with brief quotations from both the critical articles and the travel narratives? (No quote over two lines long)

Yes____ No____

8. Sentence Level Concerns

Are sentence lengths varied? Yes____ No____

Are any very short sentences included? Yes___ No___

Are sentences varied and subject begun sentences avoided? Yes___ No___

9. Punctuation:  One point is deducted from your grade for every punctuation error

Check for comma usage

Check for correctly punctuated quotations

10. Circle forms of "to be" (Is, are, am, were, was, be, been, being)

11.   Circle sentence beginnings.

12.   Get rid of 5 unnecessary words. Draw a line through them in the paper.  Then list them here:

13.  Underline any grammar problems or sentences which are unclear or hear to read. Don't neglect this step. And don’t hold back. It is very important for the writer. How many such sentences did you underline? ___________________