English 2041- Writing Assignment #2: Critiquing a Travel Narrative
Editing Sheet
Editor:________________________________ Writer:____________________________
Writer: Please turn in this editing sheet along with the draft the
editor responded to when you submit your final copy.
Editor: If you didn't finish
editing in class, this sheet should be completed at home and returned to the
writer in the following class.
This paper is to be written in traditional expository format (introduction, body, conclusion).
Read Only the first two paragraphs:
1. Check 1st Paragraph
Yes____ No___ Paper has a title
Yes____ No___ Interesting lead-e.g., question, quotation, provocative statement
Yes____ No___ Introductory Device -Which One? (
Yes____ No___ Brief mention of
article and author critiqued
Yes____ No___ Titles of articles are correctly punctuated
Yes____ No___ Thesis statement which hints at main argument
of paper. Can indicate an organizational scheme.
Yes____ No___ Paper is 750 - 1,000 words (3-4 pages)
Interesting lead -- Yes___ No___
2. Thesis – Is the thesis set up in the beginning paragraph? Yes___No___
What is the thesis/purpose of the paper? What will the writer prove or illustrate?
Read the rest of the essay now.
3. Does the thesis predict what comes in the body of essay? Yes___No___
Comments:
4. Organization –
(A). Number the paragraphs in the paper and give each a two-word label (label content, not purpose). What organization scheme seems to be present? Should it be changed?
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(B). Does each paragraph contain only one main idea? Yes____ No____
Indicate Number of Problem Paragraphs:
5. Concluding device— Yes___ No___ Which One? (Check Class homepage) and (No summaries please)6. Paragraphs--
Are transition devices present in the first sentence of every paragraph? Yes___ No___
If not, which paragraphs need them? _______________
Do the topic sentences contain words that announce the section of the paper under consideration? Yes____No____
Indicate any problem paragraphs:
Does each paragraph contain only one main idea? Yes____ No____
Indicate any problem paragraphs
7. Development
What six assertions being discussed in the paper?
Are these six items discussed with brief quotations from both the critical articles and the travel narratives? (No quote over two lines long)
Yes____ No____
8. Sentence Level Concerns
Are sentence lengths varied? Yes____ No____
Are any very short sentences included? Yes___ No___
Are sentences varied and subject begun sentences avoided? Yes___ No___
9. Punctuation: One point is deducted from your grade for every punctuation error
Check for comma usage
Check for correctly punctuated quotations
10. Circle forms of "to be" (Is, are, am, were, was, be, been, being)
11. Circle sentence beginnings.
12. Get rid of 5 unnecessary words. Draw a line through them in the paper. Then list them here:
13. Underline any grammar problems or sentences which are unclear or hear to read. Don't neglect this step. And don’t hold back. It is very important for the writer. How many such sentences did you underline? ___________________